Pirates of The Caribbean Mary Sues ([info]piratesues) wrote,
@ 2003-08-14 23:29:00
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And today's sue is ... zzz ... ACH! It's okay, really. Sortov. Uhm..
I am dead tired, so don't expect too much chatter from my end today. You all will just have to pick up the slack. :)

TITLE: Secrets of the Caribbean
AUTHOR: Plateado

NAME(S): Scarlett Bane - A/N: Scarlett Bane is of NO relation to the prostitute named Scarlet in the movie, just so you guys know.
AFFILIATION: pirate
HAIR COLOR: blonde
EYE COLOR: green
SPECIAL POSESSIONS: none

HISTORY: Was yet another female crew member of the Black Pearl previous to Barbossa's mutiny.

CONNECTIONS TO CHARACTERS: Is apparently Jack's ex-girlfriend seeking revenge on him. Would be okay, except it's clear she will re-hook-up with Jack in future chapters.

NOTES: zzz....

SAMPLE OF THE STORY:



Or you could have just ... pulled her up.

.“Scarlett, toss it to me!” The climbing figure looked up sharply, briefly pausing in her long climb. He knew she could hear their pursuers coming; of everyone on the Black Pearl, she had the keenest hearing. He held his breath as she took another two steps up the side of the ship. “I said, throw it to me!” he shouted down to her, and this time she had no other choice than to comply. Reluctantly she reached down the front of her shirt, removed a single object from their hiding place between her breasts, and, with one hand tightly gripping the rope, threw it up to him. He grabbed it in his right hand and stepped away from the bulwark. He briefly closed his eyes and took a deep breath. “Good-bye, Scarlett,” he whispered to the wind. With the flick of his wrist, the sword that had been hanging at his side was unsheathed and the blade cut into the wooden railing as it sliced the thick rope into two pieces. The surprised shout of Scarlett Bane, followed by a loud splash, brought all on deck to a standstill. The captain of the Black Pearl glared at them all angrily. “What are you standing around for!” he shouted at his crew. “Get going!” The crew snapped back to reality.

Breathing deeply, the captain strode across the deck and into his cabin, letting the door swing shut behind him. He dropped heavily into his desk chair, kicked his feet up onto the desk, and stared at the object he held in his hand. The gem was still warm from when it had been tucked between Scarlett Bane’s breasts.

The cabin doors swung open and a large man stepped into the room. “Captain, we can’t just leave her there!” he exclaimed, looking at his captain with utter disbelief. “I know what she means to you, so I’m certain that-”

“Stick to the code, Bootstrap,” the captain growled, quickly placing the gem inside one of his desk drawers and locking it. He tucked the key into one of his many pockets and stood to his feet. He walked across the cabin to a small bar in the corner. “We stick to the code.” Admitting defeat, Bootstrap Bill saluted his captain and left.






Sparkly sparkly.. something.. falling.. asleeeep..

The cloaked figure turned around so they were facing the Commodore, and then reached up to pull back the hood. Commodore Norrington started, completely surprised that the caller was a woman. Her thick, long blonde hair draped over her shoulders and her bright green eyes twinkled with a sarcastic gleam. “Commodore,” she said, dipping her head in a vague salute. When he returned the nod, she smiled and walked forward, holding out her hand. He grasped it with his own and was surprised by the woman’s hidden strength.

“Might I know your name, my lady?” Commodore Norrington asked, setting his weapon aside. She released his hand and took a seat in a straight-backed chair before the Commodore’s desk.

“Before I release that information to you, I ask of you to promise me that you will not call for my arrest.”

Commodore Norrington raised an eyebrow as he took his own seat. He studied her, trying to place a name to her beautiful face. She was familiar, though the reason why completely eluded him. “I vow that I will not, but if you so much as raise a hand toward me, I will call for assistance.”

“Granted,” she replied smoothly. She paused before continuing. “My name is Scarlett Bane, and I have come to give you word of a certain pirate that I know you would love to get your hands on.” The expression on the Commodore’s face was priceless.

“Scarlett Bane?” he repeated with a dubious look. “The comrade and lover of Jack Sparrow?”



*falls over*



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Hey! Mr. Fic!
[info]armanininja
2003-08-15 08:06 am UTC (link)
You're fired, dammit.

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[info]bosswolf
2003-08-15 11:38 am UTC (link)
...all right, since you're not going to rip it apart, I shall.

I've only read the excerpts, but... WHEN WILL THESE PEOPLE START DOING A LITTLE RESEARCH?!?!?! Pirate ships were democracies; if any fool captain did that to a crew member, they could count on not being captain for very long, because I GUARANTEE you that each other crew member would be thinking "What if that's ME next time?" ...and we all know Jack's no fool.

...I've read a little bit of the fic (gag) in the beginning of Norrington's part. ....Norrington's way too smart to make a promise to such an obviously shadowy character. Simply because she's female shouldn't change anything. You wouldn't expect him to behave politely to Anamaria, now, would you? (Research, research, research. Real female pirates were bigger scoundrels then the men.)

...and that "Granted" bothers me. Why would you say "granted"? "Deal" would be more like it, or "acceptable"... it's not like he's REQUESTING anything.

Grar.

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[info]collie_wing
2003-08-15 04:43 pm UTC (link)
Hiiiii Wolfie! *waves like a dork*

I'd offer comment on this but I just got my butt kicked by a 16 hand mare and I have to go take painkillers. Umm....disobeying the captain is bad news, I think you'd die.

And seriously, anyone else get the idea that Jack's entire friggin' crew was made up of beautiful females, and as part of the curse they all got turned into motley guy pirates?

Anamaria could kick her ass, I bet this one can't even salsa. Waiiiit, wrong movie.

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(Anonymous)
2003-08-15 12:16 pm UTC (link)
Obviously, Jack should've originally crewed the Black Pearl with lots of female pirates, since they all naturally oppose the mutiny. Of course, with a ship full of them Jack probably would've marooned himself just to get away.

There's an idea...take all the pirate Sues, give them their own ship (perhaps named the Sparklypoo, in homage to the Harry Potter comic) and then set fire to their ship. That should take care of the lot.

--CB

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(Anonymous)
2003-08-15 12:25 pm UTC (link)
It's called the H.M.S. Loreli

and there are more fun things to do to a ship full of Mary Sues than just set fire to it.

-KnifeEdge

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It's too early...
[info]ghanihwi
2003-08-15 03:14 pm UTC (link)
Would be okay, except it's clear she will re-hook-up with Jack in future chapters.

I don't intend to bring your full wrath down upon my head- but (excusing the fact that this particular story isn't all that great even without the impending romance) aren't you being a little short-sighted on the matter? I'm just trying to understand- but are you saying that any hetero-OC-female pairing in any genre is automatically a horrible story waiting to happen? It just seems to be selling authors (like me) a little short, is all. No offense intended.

*claps hands together*

“Captain, we can't just leave her there!” he exclaimed, looking at his captain with utter disbelief. “I know what she means to you, so I’m certain that-”

Yeah, and Jack doesn't keel-haul his ass? Right. You never question a Captain's orders, unless you intend to mutiny. On the sea- the Captain comes before God.

“We stick to the code.”

"We stick to the movie dialogue! It was okay, wasn't it? Argh!"

“Scarlett Bane?” he repeated with a dubious look. “The comrade and lover of Jack Sparrow?"

Ummm. Correct me if I'm wrong, but *checks above* Scarlett was tossed off of a ship without a nickle to her name, right? So how is it that she has been able to afford clothing nice enough and been able to clean herself up enough to be presentable to Norrington as a lady? *scratches head* Oh wait, I know: She's an effing Mary Sue! *slaps forehead*

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Re: It's too early...
[info]affabletoaster
2003-08-15 06:37 pm UTC (link)
I don't intend to bring your full wrath down upon my head- but (excusing the fact that this particular story isn't all that great even without the impending romance) aren't you being a little short-sighted on the matter? I'm just trying to understand- but are you saying that any hetero-OC-female pairing in any genre is automatically a horrible story waiting to happen? It just seems to be selling authors (like me) a little short, is all. No offense intended.


The trouble is, she, being a Sue, will angst about it. Incessantly. And, being a Sue, she doesn't deserve Jack. So...yes, it's a bad thing.

There are very few "hetero-OC-female pairing[s] in any genre" that are NOT "a horrible story waiting to happen". It's regrettable, but generally the female OC's are wish fulfillment on the part of the writer, quick and cheap ways to get into the actors' pants. Granted, there are occasionally well-written Oc-romances, but they are few and far between. Weep for the fandoms, my friends.

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Re: It's too early...
[info]ghanihwi
2003-08-15 07:17 pm UTC (link)
Well, that answers my question. :oD Thank you.

It's regrettable, but generally the female OC's are wish fulfillment on the part of the writer, quick and cheap ways to get into the actors' pants.

I know how dumb it sounds to vouch for one's work- especially through the anonymity of message boards- but I can say that although I'm a solid OC female romance writer- I've never been guilty of doing this. Honestly, I'm happy with my life and relationships- I don't have to insert myself into a story to feel more cool or desired. I actually enjoy creating OC's with personalities very different from my own- it is a wonderful experience to see another point of view vicariously through a character I have created. As for self-insertion- there is a difference between placing yourself, your mannerisms, your colloquialisms, and your image into a story and creating an OC through whose eyes you see the world around you.

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Re: It's too early...
[info]gogoarmstrong
2003-08-15 11:24 pm UTC (link)
I'm glad that you are doing a good job. Go you. It's just that as soon as we see an OC/canon romance, our danger flags immediately go up. Paranoid? Perhaps, but our suspicions turn out to be true 99% of the time.

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Re: It's too early...
[info]affabletoaster
2003-08-15 11:27 pm UTC (link)
Whoops. That's me ^, my brother didn't log out of his account, and as he's a new user, I'm not used to logging others out of their accounts. Sorry!

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Re: It's too early...
[info]piratesues
2003-08-15 07:23 pm UTC (link)
I was like, half-comatose when I did this review. Cut me some slack. >_O

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Re: It's too early...
[info]ghanihwi
2003-08-15 07:46 pm UTC (link)
Hahahahahaha. *pouts* FINE then. >_O

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